Evening Song

Jean Toomer (1894–1967) · 1923

ABBA · 12 lines · from Cane

Full moon rising on the waters of my heart,Lakes and moon and fires,Cloine tires,Holding her lips apart.

Promises of slumber leaving shore to charm the moon,Miracle made vesper-keeps,Cloine sleeps,And I’ll be sleeping soon.

Cloine, curled like the sleepy waters where the moon-waves start,Radiant, resplendently she gleams,Cloine dreams,Lips pressed against my heart.

Words in this poem

vesper n.
The evening star; Hesper; Venus, when seen after sunset; hence, the evening. [L., the evening, the evening star, the west; akin to Gr. west. Cf. Hesperian, Vespers.]

Definitions and etymologies from Webster's Unabridged Dictionary, 1913.

About this text

Evening Song is in the public domain. This text is taken from Cane, Project Gutenberg ebook #60093; the transcription's header, footer and licence were removed and nothing else was changed. You may copy, print and reuse it freely.

Cite as: Jean Toomer, Evening Song, in Cane (1923), text of Project Gutenberg ebook #60093, Laurel, https://laurelpoetry.com/poem/toomer-cane/evening-song.html, id L01567.

Form and metre

Evening Song is 12 lines in 3 stanzas of 4 lines each. Every stanza rhymes ABBA. 89% of its stressed syllables fall where the metre puts the beat. The lines average 6.9 syllables. 2 lines end on an unstressed syllable, a feminine ending.

Measured by Laurel's pipeline, not copied from a handbook: how stress and metre are counted, how rhyme is lettered, how a drifted rhyme is found. Where the dictionary cannot confirm a rhyme the letter is withheld, not guessed.

Rhyme words, stanza by stanza

The word that ends each line, lettered by the rhyme it makes; a dash is a line whose rhyme the dictionary could not confirm.

  1. 1 ABBA heartA · firesB · tiresB · apartA
  2. 2 ABBA moonA · keepsB · sleepsB · soonA
  3. 3 ABBA startA · gleamsB · dreamsB · heartA
Scansion, line by line

Each line with its syllable count and the stresses the words themselves fix: / stressed, ˘ unstressed, · a syllable the word leaves free and the metre decides. How this is done.

LineSyl.Stress
Full moon rising on the waters of my heart,11··/˘··/˘···
Lakes and moon and fires,6····/˘
Cloine tires,3·/˘
Holding her lips apart.6/˘··˘/
Promises of slumber leaving shore to charm the moon,12/˘·/˘/˘·····
Miracle made vesper-keeps,7/˘˘·/˘·
Cloine sleeps,2··
And I’ll be sleeping soon.6···/˘·
Cloine, curled like the sleepy waters where the moon-waves start,13····/˘/˘·····
Radiant, resplendently she gleams,9/˘˘······
Cloine dreams,2··
Lips pressed against my heart.6······

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